April 29th ,2019
You have very strong work here I mean it is absolutely outstanding. It really shows your understanding and passion for the topic. You use the perfect pieces of evidence. Your writing was well written and well expressed. However, I do feel like you could have wrapped up your paragraphs better that what you did your writing is very strong but their isn’t any point if you don’t connect it back to the topic. You should also be careful with the subjective voice in your writing. Other than that your writing is really good.